Love and Loss

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This poem is about me transitioning out of one relationship and stumbling into another.... i guess you could call it a rebound... but it caused more damage than the first...

Love and Loss

There i stood one foot in, one foot out,
Going through the motions, my mind filled
with doubt.
Barely shutting one door,
for you to open up one more.
You stood in that doorway so calm
arms open,
receiving me so fully, you took me in
when i was broken,
You gave me the love that i lacked,
like Bonnie and Clyde You always had 
my back.
Oh how you promised you'd never 
walk in to walk out,
You really showed me what love was
all about.
Comforting me in ways undescribably
Oh how i thought you'd never lie to me,
never hide from me, you see,
you were everything i needed you to be.
That was until she started calling you,
the one who you tried to hold on to,
the one who rejected your advances,
who paid no mind to your romances,
yet she was prized in your eyes,
filling you with her empty lies.
She called and you went running,
Oh she was very cunning,
or maybe you were just too stupid
to see,
you already had everything in me.
You had a diamond and left it for
a stone,
that's why when she left you,
You were all alone.


 

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BrokenHeart2009 commented on Love and Loss

10-06-2010

You are a very talented writer, I love reading your poems.

sweetchinee commented on Love and Loss

10-06-2010

thank you!

ESSENCEOFLOVE commented on Love and Loss

10-06-2010

I love the expression in this poem. The one you love and prize don't love you. You captured the feeling of sadness as well as you got what you deserved for not valuing me. Well done. Great read!!!

If I feel physically as if the top of my head were taken off, I know that is poetry.

Emily Dickinson (1830-1886) American poet.

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