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These are some song lyrics to a song I am working on, about a girl I once knew.


I met Christine at Aberdeen,
we were all of seventeen,
Been so it seems a dream

(short guitar riff) (melancholic, bluesy)

Summer, long gone, beyond compare,
her adolescent, evanescent stare,
once brought joy, but now only despair

(short guitar riff)

Christine's eyes of Hazel Green,
like medusa glare, so serene,
the vacuum of her stare, to the naked eye, unseen

(Louder and faster riff)


Christine, Christine, She..will..steal, your dreams!
And in heaven and hell, leave them inbetween!

(short riff)

Christine, Christine! She'll rip out your heart, then spleen,
And throw you to sharks, for your bones to be picked clean

(guitar riff, loud fading to soft, then back to verse)

She speaks of Love, with much acclaim,
but to her it is all just a game,
don't fall victim to her entrancing gaze

(back to riff, soft again)

She chews her words, and spits them out,
to her lies, she is devout,
you'll go in with a soul, and leave without, Christine

(short riff)

She'll get you drunk on Kentucky rum,
and wait til you're feeling, comfortably numb,
and when you succumb, she'll crush you like Tom Thumb

(Louder and faster riff again)


Christine! Christine! She..will..steal, your dreams!
Her beauty,, into her scheme

(short loud riff)

Christine! Christine! She'll rip out your heart and spleen,
And to the fishes, be thrown, to be picked clean

(guitar solo)

(back to final verse, soft)

Over time, pain begins to fray,
time has a way of rubbing away,
the memory of the pain left behind by, Christine

(guitar solo to fade out)

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Charlie23 commented on Christine


Old flame? Nicely done, Spence - I like that it's written as a song!

carynontherhine commented on Christine


I really liked this poem. A love can be so absorbing that it can almost take every breath from you and leave you without words to speak. Takes you so by surprise that you believe their lies. Good for you by getting away if this was your love. If not, still a magnificent poem. Cary on the Rhine

knight4696 commented on Christine


SuSpence - I love these lyrics. Not a bad poem either. lol! :) I think I met this girl in my younger daze. :) I see you are a lyricist as well, I have many song lyrics posted here too, about Love, Evil, Confusion, Music etc ,, I try to span across the genre's ... Anyway, Great job pal! :) Ken



Thanks again for the read my friend, seems everyone of us comes across a Christine at sometime in our lives, no pun intended LOL. I will have to check out some of your lyrics soon my friend. Thanks. ~Spence

WinterFrost commented on Christine


I think I've seen this movie winterfrost

KING commented on Christine


Its in these moments where we wish Karma would do her work and strike hard. Instead, she comes when we least expect it and it might not mean much then. Great piece man. I think alot fo us have had a someone like christine at least once in our lives. :)

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Sonnet 3 21
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Passing Thoughts 16
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Ode To My Love 17
Angel With Butterfly Wings 20
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Sometimes... 37
Transport 34
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The Generation Who Sold The World 30
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Glenn Beck (Haiku) Compilation 32
The Tragic Tale of Alejandro Vega 56
Ballad of the Lost Man 32
Gulf of Fire (Haiku) 34
Fade to White 34
Ugly World 53
Searchin' for Love 26
Lost am I 28
Shards of Me 27
The Sadness, 10
The New Moon 18
I Imagine, 13
Lovesick, Lonesome Blues 11
Beautiful Poet 10
The Morning Sun 5
A Question for Love 13
Realm of Delusion 26
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