Heartfelt Tale Of A Broken Record

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Critiques, comments, etc. are encouraged. :] This poem is pretty dark, and I'm not too sure how I feel about it. Poems I write while listening to songs always turn out differently...This one was written while listening to Desire by Megurine Luka [it's Japanese, because if I try writing while listening to english songs I get to hung up on the lyrics].

Heartfelt Tale Of A Broken Record

Girls for friends and boys to bleed,
Break this mirror and look at me.
It rains glass in a world of black;
No more is the urge to evade.
Chaos twirls around me now;
I can't see it, but I can feel it so.
A porcelain man extends his hand:
"Imitation is perhaps a sin."

I'm lifted to a world I've never seen;
Monotone fields have no end here.
I'm expelled backwards to the ground.
The sky rains blood-red water down;
The world is slowly stained.
My eyes are broken like that mirror;
The world is reflected in a thousand different ways.
The monotone flowers crumble like stone;
I'm returned to the black and woe.
The porcelain man caresses my face:
"My dear, to touch is a blessing of grace."

My head contains one hundred worlds,
But I can't tell which one is real!
How should all this make me feel...?
Imaginary friends and venomous bites;
The perpetual fall, spite-ridden
And sad. I scream for answers,
But there's but one response.
"These are matters of love..."

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MJFowler commented on Heartfelt Tale Of A Broken Record

10-05-2010

This is very moving. I can envison the sorrow and feel your sadness.

Poetry is not a turning loose of emotion, but an escape from emotion.

T. S. Eliot (1888-1965) American-English poet and playwright.

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