With Every Step

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With Every Step

These shoes mark the pavement,
Like walking paint brushes;
Each step puts one more dent
Into the system's boring grey.
Sometimes fun is a pin
Amidst a giant world of fray,
A needle that's found deep within
A labyrinth of hay!
If everyone puts on these shoes
And dances 'till the dawn;
They'll substitute shoes for brushes,
To paint the world in song.
We'll fight against the order's throne;
We'll swim against the grain.
With every step we'll splash color
Into the monotone!

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WriterGenevieve commented on With Every Step

10-16-2010

Like Serenity said - this is incredibly imaginative and BEAUTIFULLY colorful! I really like it.

SerenityWintirs commented on With Every Step

09-19-2010

So imaginative and nice colorful metaphor. It kind of reminds me of Maya Angelou or something like that.

soccerchick556 commented on With Every Step

09-19-2010

I don't like it........... I LOVE IT! I am sure you could win anything with that poem!

Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words.

Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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