The Drain

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    This is relatively old, and just really different. What do you guys think of this short, enjambed style?

    The Drain

    Water drop
    Journies through lands,
    Falling through the drain--
    Winding down
    Like liquid lies,
    Disintergrating
    Into the ground
    To be never seen

    Again.

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    FranzJ commented on The Drain

    07-14-2010

    short and sweet - where does the water go - - - - -
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    Tyme commented on The Drain

    07-13-2010

    But remember, the water rises again in the heated mist back to the glorious sky!
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    FadingFebruary

    07/14/2010

    Aha! That is very true! You have a point there :]

    A poem begins as a lump in the throat, a sense of wrong, a homesickness, a lovesickness. It finds the thought and the thought finds the words.

    Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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