My Immortal Death

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    My Immortal Death

     Imortal soul,
    I curse thee:
    life without end.
    A dance which continues,
    meant to transcend-
    the walls of time
    yet fall
    within the abyss,
    for the hour stands still
    as my soul floats adrift.
    There are those
    that doubt my sanity-
    I am not insane;
    but simply tired of
    this play-this stage.
    The production is empty
    of meaningful rhyme-
    the words have been twisted
    on the pathways of time.
    Yet misery loves company,
    or so it is said;
    follish mortals
    can't you see,
    death sets your free,
    from the meaningless dribble
    we call society.
    To transverse the paths
    of mystery's life
    and break away
    from this world's endless strife.

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    danmartyjake1 commented on My Immortal Death

    12-12-2009

    Well crafted prose and it's subject important to ponder...... the truth of the soul is felt in the heart........you have given a glimpse of yours here.
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    Marsink commented on My Immortal Death

    12-12-2009

    I'm no fun. I disagree with the premise that death is our keeper, or savior. If you seek wisdom and truth, with all of your heart and mind, then the truth will set you free to live, not die. (kinda crazy concept, huh?) that aside, it's a very well constructed piece of poetry, and worthy of meditation
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    inkmaster commented on My Immortal Death

    10-14-2009

    Nice great thinking... good reading.. It actually makes you think about how we are all mortal and fragile ...cool inspiration...inkmaster
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    mamasan commented on My Immortal Death

    10-12-2009

    Ah, but death does not set us free; we are here and come back over and over to try to get things straightened out and peace visit this planet of seeming woe. That is why I don't fear death but become weary when I realize, I have been here many times before (eons) but we still ain't got it right.
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    MrGee commented on My Immortal Death

    08-24-2009

    Interesting poem and i am quite enamoured to the line that reads from the meaningless dribble we call society. The poem has a nice rhtymn and good rhymn. and the line are well place in this work. and yes death does set us free. and its refreeshing to read a poem that is concise. now for the rating 10 seem befitting this work.
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