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the loss of a friend is among the greatest grief


on the news
they flashed her smiling grace
at that very moment
tears rushed down my face
the media showed her photos
the happy ever after
the promised but failed fruition
not the longing in her laughter

she was a song
sung sweet or strong
she was a lovely dance

when she walked by
she left water-coloured images
in your mind's eye
but like everything beautiful, she could break
her multi-layered wings burned too close to the sun
she fell from the sky and was strangled by a lake

my eyes will stay damp with tears
but i will celebrate her life
for the rest of my years

i miss you, lauren

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gmcookie commented on lauren


What can be said? Life is sometimes not just. But then again, it never pretends to be. The loss of a friend leaves a wound that never really heals over. But we owe it to the departed to keep on pushin' and bring meaning to this unjust planet.



thank you .

jademelissa74 commented on lauren


Crush, I havent' been around the site in quite a while. I am truly sorry to be made aware of such news, especially through a well-offered poem. The piercing feeling is raw, exposing a fresh wound. Thank you for sharing this with us. God bless and stay up.



oh thank you so much for your time and understanding.

WordSlinger commented on lauren


Crush, your poetry is always a great read, but this one shows the readers how delicious your skills are, Icing, and the cake itself is appreciated, as the customer says to the baker, I'll be back, good day.. ty WS



lol....thank you WS. i adore you. your comments on my work are great and are actually more expressive than my poems. thank you for your time.

arronpalmer commented on lauren


My girlfriend's name is Lauren. This moved me. The last line is so so simple, but effective. I'd like to say well done, but of course I'd rather you'd never had to have written it, and that your Lauren was still around. Still, nice tribute.



i am sure your lauren is as lovely as mine was / is. just treat her like a princess. thank you for your time. i do so appreciate it.

Jammin commented on lauren


I love "...the longing in her laughter..." How grief-stricken you sound. I hope all is a little lighter now... Her beauty was wonderfully conveyed. How lucky to have known such a woman...



she is missed and thank you for your compliment. it is most appreciated.

If I feel physically as if the top of my head were taken off, I know that is poetry.

Emily Dickinson (1830-1886) American poet.

Crush’s Poems (59)

Title Comments
Title Comments
carried off by owls 1
Santa Claus Is Coming Around 1
skin 2
the midnight girl 1
hold 1
here 0
the other 1
flashback 1
violent pretty 1
the people in the attic 1
the ride 1
my nightmares are awake 1
no bugs 6
waiting 3
welcome 5
a fetus in a clear bowling ball 6
crows feet 7
rats 5
the mobster 4
perfect 6
jumper 5
lady godiva 3
malaise 3
pirate 4
flight on time 3
fear of falling 4
unfinished crow ? 5
touch ( aka, am i made of summer ) 8
elephant 5
cancer 8
skyline 5
st. saviour 2
satellites 4
were you waiting for me ? 10
snapshot 5
fists 12
lauren 17
insomnia 18
ceremony 12
mother 14
ash 27
the june bug 15
low 19
thorns 10
paralyzed 9
mr. sparkle 15
dresses 15
glass 13
cemetaries 18
throe 18
if i fell in love 27
pills 22
off black 20
mannequin 22
umbrage 12
sick boy 12
kelly has a big head 21
unfairly fairy 26