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well i wrote this about me and my friend...its..its just something we thought about

See

I see my future in your eyes

and you see your past

in mine

people can see how much we both ache for a better life

but we know

it is not coming anytime soon

we won't be able to live or dreams,

and have a world of singing not crying

a world of living not dying

people see that twinkle in our eyes

that says “ I want to be free!”

now the only thing that I see

is a life that isn't any better, happier.

But yet as I gaze upon the days of the past

I realize that better days will come.

For we have already gone through all of the bad things

now we leave only better things

to dream and wish for

just look around and SEE

what we want to be someday

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Shelbylolann commented on See

02-15-2011

You are so talented :) I loved and enjoied reading this. :) Great write hun... (: .......... Love, Shelbz

winterkou commented on See

01-13-2011

I always hope for the better days , The Lord God above has brought them too many . I know see bright beautiful sober days.

Musicmynded1 commented on See

01-13-2011

Good positive ending my dear... keep writing, thinking and dreaming.

brokenhearted11 commented on See

01-12-2011

i was hooked from the very first line! great job here. absolutely amazing. i totally got where you were coming from, and it made me think. 10. keep writing!

Poetry is either something that lives like fire inside you or else it is nothing, an empty formalized bore around which pedants can endlessly drone their notes and explanations.

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