The Unknown Dream

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    well i wrote this in school about the immigrants coming to angel island....hope you all enjoy

    The Unknown Dream

    I step off the boat

    a smile on my face

    people start to welcome me to angel island

    children laugh and hug their mothers close

    as the talk about the dreams they have in store

    I walk through many door ways

    as people lead me to the united states

    I know here I will have a new life, become a new person

     

    -But this doesn't seem real. This has to be a dream, it has to be-

    -Just then the boat jerked, it was a dream-

     

    I step off the boat, a smile on my face

    then as I look around that happiness starts to fade to deep despair

    I see children crying, people frowning

    some get turned back, others are led down long narrow hallways

    into rooms hat are so damp and dark you don't know where you are

    they stay there for who knows how long

    finally it is my turn to be asked the usual questions

    they tell me to go wait somewhere else

     

    -I pray to god that they will let me through-

    -my fate still unknown...-

     

     

     

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    brokenhearted11 commented on The Unknown Dream

    03-10-2011

    Great poem you've got here! I love the ending especially, and the twist in the middle was unexpected. I ventured in, reading a happy poem, but it swerved into a depressing one. Amazing job, keep writing!

    JonTalbain commented on The Unknown Dream

    02-20-2011

    Sounds Like a bad trip through Ellis Island. Yet it is the plight of most immigrants in the history of the US. They are told one thing, and they are duped into a hard life in the new country. But the hope that remains there isn't allowed to be crushed.

    sk8erpoet

    02/22/2011

    great point thank you

    When power leads man towards arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations. When power narrows the area of man's concern, poetry reminds him of the richness and diversity of existence. When power corrupts, poetry cleanses.

    John F. Kennedy (1917-1963) Thirty-fifth President of the USA

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