All in a Second

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All in a Second

You sit there across from me,
Watching intently , What do you see?
Something about my eyes? Something bright,
Something not quite right, Something dark,
Sitting across from me you stare, I stare back,
You look deep into my eyes, Past the smile and the twinkle,
You feel as if you are being sucked into them,
As if on a roller coaster ride on a steep decline,
Picking up speed as you drop out of sight,
It's taking you deeper, Faster, Darker and Colder,
Your hanging on, You see no end, Just a bottomless pit,
Your thinking where could this end,
Feeling there is no escape, Falling faster,
Your spinning out of control,
As the darkness rushes up to grab you,

You looked into my eyes and Screamed

Richard(PHOENIX)Cartledge © 5/17/2009

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TNTangel commented on All in a Second

06-25-2009

This poem gave me goosebumps... It kind of haunted my soul for just a minute.

LouKyBabe commented on All in a Second

06-24-2009

Choice of words...great. mental picture...great. i give it a 10.

am2anangel commented on All in a Second

05-27-2009

very well written you hit it right putting this as dark poetry. you can feel the evilness that is taking over. I enjoyed the chills.

Orchid commented on All in a Second

05-25-2009

As a lover of poetry, this poem was very moving. I love how it builds and draws those same emotions as your reading it. You start out as a spectator and then you realize, geez this is you.

kdarcy commented on All in a Second

05-24-2009

An interesting piece this one, the title for me is the grabber ... and your words definately follow through, great read for me.

In science one tries to tell people, in such a way as to be understood by everyone, something that no one ever knew before. But in poetry, it's the exact opposite.

Franz Kafka (1883-1924) Czech writer.

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