INSIGNIFICANT

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thought it would make a interesting song and or/a poem ..you ever feel this way?????

INSIGNIFICANT

You entered the party as I knew you would,
Watching you from across the room, Drink in hand,
Hoping for some recognition  from your divine vision,
You never do, Too busy with your own show,

Over hearing two guys, They'll wait till she leaves,
Follow her out and see who has fun in the dark,
Taking turns till there's nothing left,  She's so hot,
Looking the way she does,  Shes just asking for it,

I was there when you were in danger,
Too scared to see,  I stepped in saving you again,
Bruised and bloody, They were in worse shape,
The doorman called the cops, Time to pick up the trash,

You went back to the party, You needed a drink,
Looking around,  Searching for your hero,
There were so many choices,  You brushed past me,
Saying excuse me without looking,
Blood on your hand you realized too late,
Your hero was here, Before you could turn around,
I was gone, Without a clue as to my identity,

Looking at you, Looking through me,
As if I'm not there, While standing right here,
Sometimes it seems,  Some one average,  Like me,
Could do so much,       And not be seen....

Richard E. Cartledge  PHOENIX     (c)


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JadedJezzabel commented on INSIGNIFICANT

08-02-2010

Some people are so centered on them selves they could be hit by lightening and no even notice.......it is not a reflection of you being insignificant....its a reflection on how really blinded some people are. nice one

Phoenix9

08/02/2010

Thanks for the great comments

HarverTomsson commented on INSIGNIFICANT

12-30-2009

Richard, it wouldn't have happened if you'd had shades on! Yeah it would. That type don't see ordinary people, even with shades. HT

jademelissa74 commented on INSIGNIFICANT

12-29-2009

Wow! Richard, this is awesome. We are so selfish, self-seeking at times that we allow the beauty of the heart pass us by without a glance, simply unnoticed. This is a thought-provoking piece. A great write!

tierra7 commented on INSIGNIFICANT

12-29-2009

Brilliant! ..i enjoyed its flow....you have created a very humble piece..what a hero.......ty for sharin'...Namaste...Terra @}-'-,-

gogant commented on INSIGNIFICANT

12-29-2009

You have caught a too real piece of humanity with this one. A well conceived piece, indeed..................................gogant

Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words.

Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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