MEMORIES of a TRANSPARENT MIND

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MEMORIES of a TRANSPARENT MIND

Looking at, Staring into my thoughts, Visible,  My  life is show and tell,

Beyond the memories trapped with so many others, Sometimes clear,

Like water that rushes up to the shoreline, Only to be pulled back,

To deeper  water, Washing over every rock as if they were memories,

Trapped within the fathoms, Translucent in memory, Slowly faded,

Like every other one, Numbered as the stars above, Covered in darkness,

Quiet and alone, Sleeping until called upon once more to reminisce, Remember,

Crystal clear, Wafer thin like a pain in the glass,  Reflecting what we wish,

My memories have all been listed,  My thoughts can not be shared,

I stare ahead at the wall,  My mind is just as blank, My memories hidden,

All lined up with no place to go, Like quick silver, Gone with but a touch,

Reflecting what once was, When I knew how to feel, Buried with out love,

Only to be lost again in the recesses of your mind, Invisible, Like a dream.....

Richard E. Cartledge   PHOENIX     1/6/2011©



 

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mla commented on MEMORIES of a TRANSPARENT MIND

02-12-2011

My thoughts cannot be shared - how unusual and interesting. Philosophers have gone to great lengths to discuss what you sum up in 5 words.

JadedJezzabel commented on MEMORIES of a TRANSPARENT MIND

01-18-2011

like the visual impressions this artistic work leaves me with.........

cousinsoren commented on MEMORIES of a TRANSPARENT MIND

01-17-2011

I recognize this poem as a profoundly deep and sombre or moody contemplative meta-psychological extended metaphor. Wow, quite a mouthful description, but that is what it is. The images are crystal clear and strikingly piquant e.g. "translucent memory," . " Looking at, Staring into my thoughts." is a grand and appropriiate opening line, which sets the tone or tenor of what to expect in the content or body of the poem. " My life is show and tell," is a similar of crystal and familiar clarity, The rest of the similes possess that crystal clear quality and aer all appropriate and graceful inserted into the poem. Poetry -prose is distinguished from prose by being more ornate . Phoenix you are demonstrating that you are a master in composing prose poetry, by no means , an easy genre of poetry. My rating 10x10x10.

carolw commented on MEMORIES of a TRANSPARENT MIND

01-14-2011

This is unique in the way it is written. I can relate to every word that you share from the depths of your soul...thank you! Beautiful...

Rhaven commented on MEMORIES of a TRANSPARENT MIND

01-11-2011

A great write, I enjoyed reading it...plus without is one word. :P Thanks for catching my typo!

A poem begins as a lump in the throat, a sense of wrong, a homesickness, a lovesickness. It finds the thought and the thought finds the words.

Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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