STEEL LASHES

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Poetic lyrics to a poem/song I wrotea perfect love, a perfect robot hmmmmm " does my steel butt make me look fat"
another in my  A JUST LOVE  SERIES,  soroyama art inspired me also.

STEEL LASHES

Cobalt blue eyes with a titanium twist,
She can cut you with a wink,
Razor sharp, Slice and dice, Steel lashes,

Her nails are stainless steel,
Platinum edged with Remington's best,
With a twist of the wrist,  Steel Slashes,

Her passions forged of molten gold,
Spontaneous combustion she doe's best,
With a gentle touch,  A slow caress,
Your consumed in her flames,  Steel ashes,

Braided cords flow down her back,
Gun metal blue,  Electric too,
Static sparks light up the night,
Reflected in her sight,  Steel flashes,

Robotics with beauty,  Forged withh love,
Perfection in every curve,  Every desire,
Don't get lost in her embrace,
She doesn't know her own strength,  Steel Crushes...


Richard E. Cartledge    PHOENIX   (c)

A JUST LOVE  (JL)

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redbloodink commented on STEEL LASHES

12-20-2009

I like the Whimsical flow of this write....... I'm not that kinda writer really myself... it does happen at times ..... Def... a 10....

lucindaclaire commented on STEEL LASHES

12-09-2009

Hey RIchard, Bravo! I don't know as I want to meet her in a dark alley, that's for sure. Robotics...Kind of reminds me of a female R2D2 only not as cutesy.

derfiniw23 commented on STEEL LASHES

12-07-2009

Well...I just am not a poet...this, this is insaine. And I feel like everybody gets it but silly me...rats! Oh to have a poetic mind...somehow this is beautiful in it's own odd way...

Blaze commented on STEEL LASHES

12-01-2009

an erotic write, very passionate. I look forward to reading your other works.

kdarcy commented on STEEL LASHES

11-21-2009

A great job with this one as a whole, my favorite verse #3. An excellent read, you never disappoint, be well k

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