Impenitent Soliloquy


  • Altair
  • Don't read me, I am not that good.......

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well you know me.....just read it

Impenitent Soliloquy

So many colors in natural suppose as I relish in the fact I am as wind blows

never been a soul as tumultuous as so, with that being said, I grow

as the emotional slow down in sands of time I see now

that my focus is deafened to the a flow of my sound

but I persist wearing my crown and fighting the good fights

hustling through travesties, I will get the flow right.

Saw a homeless child today made think of things

his dreams may never be, is life what it seems?

To God we give power, to heaven we wish to reach

happiness we all want, but do we know how to breach

this circle of faithful beginnings the mind aims to leech

off of to feel something fulfilling in times of grief.

Bon appetite upon deceit or the truth lying beneath

the sand glassed over expecting the fruit tree

rightfully I am chi manifested beyond me

times eternity squared the elements of alchemy.

Yet none of this means a thing, so I think at times

as my rhyme pantomime entertains my blind eye

rambling nouns and tumbling verbs upon lines

force entry into my mind till it stands as I.

Contrite I am not in matters of my heart

mind, body, and soul, my ink blot holds a lot

my soliloquy scares the life of me, I need a spark

yet the dirt and soot may set ablaze my landmark

Damn! I could really use a moment of art

set apart from the quilted blanket of dark

so warm in its subplots and deceptive arks

like my Moorish wind was torched in soliloquy talks.


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1990lh commented on Impenitent Soliloquy


HA!-you , you , you, you-you and your mind-i'ma steal it-hehe. I love the way think and feel-you are fucking abnormal-hahaha-this makes me wanna write-nothing like poetry-it cant be fake.-it's like catching a feeling that has manifest itself into a thought. love-you should run for president- hahah and for your inauguration speech you should recite a poem-hahah-hugs and kisses



Here you can have it for a few weeks, youll go plum bananas the bomb boo..comments are always hmmm picturesque~



Oh YAY-IT'S ALL MIND-hmm-hmm-hmmm-I can conquer the world with this-I'm not gonna give it back-if you like I could have my mind for a few-hahaha-be careful crazy shit goes on in there-good nite-sweet dreams and beautiful nightmares to you-hugs

MootPoint commented on Impenitent Soliloquy


No, I think this is very good. I don't think you give yourself enough credit. Two things again. One, for me, don't go with the "sands of time". Not orginal. Second, this line "Saw a homeless child today made think of things" should flow better. IMHO. But really, you have a quality about your writing. Don't stop writing!



Ty for reading

windsongs commented on Impenitent Soliloquy


this poem really challenges a casual reader, all i can say is, Joey i need u :) good write:)



Lol ty wind

Poetry is finer and more philosophical than history; for poetry expresses the universal, and history only the particular.

Aristotle (384 BC-322 BC) Greek philosopher.

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