Overcome

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    Recently, a friend of mine did the unthinkable. He lost faith in tomorrow, and took his own life. In my attempt to answer the proverbial question of "Why?", I tried to put myself into the mindset of having no hope. I have written about the aftermath of suicide before, so when I made the decision to write this, I wanted to show a different perspective. So I wrote about the horror in the thoughts that can lead to it. In doing so I learned something about myself. I love life. I love being alive even when it sucks. There are so many times I remember hating going through some of what life has handed me, but now I look back and smile. It's all just part of the story. One day we all will meet our end. So lets stick around, and see what happens before we get there. Goodbye my friend, you are missed.

    Overcome

     

    Something is wrong
    suddenly I feel as though
    I have lost my faith

    On this river of doubt
    I have no control
    as I'm slowly carried away

    It's difficult to see
    The surrounding mist
    has blinded my sight

    In this prison
    I need to break free
    before I lose this fight



    It's the rage
    that wants to control me
    The rage
    that searches for me
    The rage
    that is pursuing me now

    I will not be overcome



    A stranger within
    attacks my soul
    stripping away my hope

    Living in fear
    pulls me away from love
    leaving me unable to cope

    Deaf to the word
    that once spoke to me
    I cant find my way back home

    Lost in despair
    I'm spinning out of control
    into madness I am thrown



    Fighting the rage
    that tries to control me
    The rage
    that calls out to me
    The rage
    that is flowing through me now

    I'm being overcome


    I have lost
    all that matters to me
    Lost
    all that was within me
    Lost
    all that protected me

    now I have no where to turn

    Lost
    all that loved me
    Lost
    all that was given to me
    Lost
    all that made me whole

    Forever alone I will burn

    From the rage
    that is controlling me
    The rage
    that speaks for me
    The rage
    that has consumed me

    I am now overcome

     

     

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    stellar commented on Overcome

    01-06-2010

    this is a powerful poem that perfectly captures the intensity of rage...well this saying is quite trite but it's always true..."don't base your decision solely from your emotions and feelings, because like the wind they just come and go, they are unstable and very ephemeral"///ahh quite a thought provoking poem...^_^ v
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    PoetsofBlood commented on Overcome

    12-15-2009

    Sorry for your loss, blood brother.You have truely represented him with this write!-Alexia
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    Artie

    12/16/2009

    Yeah it sucked! Thx for the words and the read

    captaininsight commented on Overcome

    11-29-2009

    Bottom is rock solid. One knows when they've hit the bottom , but from there it's all up. I share your sense of loss and know you will find your way back to the light. Rage is fear if you dig deep enough. It's easy to be overtaken by it. Your piece takes me to this dark place but your meter shows me your strength. A work I would like to hear as read by the author....hmm nice.
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    Artie

    11/29/2009

    Thx- I've never performed yet.... Maybe one day. It's true what you say about rage, I've often seen it as a reaction, or a by-product of fear. Either way, it leads to action without thought. Thx for your time.

    danmartyjake1 commented on Overcome

    11-24-2009

    Wow. this one is truly an ultimate description of the feelings that roll through the mind of a person contemplating taking their own life. It's a frightening peek at the innermost submerged thoughts that close the chapter for a lost soul. May your friend be at peace. Thanks for your beautiful talent. 10!
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    Artie

    11/24/2009

    Thx- I honestly can't imagine the amount of rage it would take for me to turn against myself in that way, and I hope I never find out

    Charlie23 commented on Overcome

    11-24-2009

    The thought process is overwhelming of what a mind decides when it sees no light. A great deal of pain, I imagine is all the mind sees. Sorry for your loss.
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    Artie

    11/24/2009

    Thx - This was a weird one to write

    Poetry is finer and more philosophical than history; for poetry expresses the universal, and history only the particular.

    Aristotle (384 BC-322 BC) Greek philosopher.

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