today

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    today

    i saw myself in the sun today
         it burned my eyes
    its warmth washed over my skin
         it burned me to a crisp


    i saw myself in the clouds today
         they filled me full of grey
    gracefully floating across the sky
         they rained down upon my face


    i heard myself in the wind today
         i was deafened by the screams
    a gentle voice flowing free
         the sound was deafening


    i saw myself in my own shadow today
         a monster did appear
    bouncing carelessly across the ground
         stalking me with fear


    i saw myself in the shade today
         huddled under a tree
    trying to cool from the summer sun 
         my body began to freeze


    i saw myself in the sun today
    its warmth washed over my skin
    and after the clouds floated by
    i saw the sun again


         with blinded eyes i tried to see
         my scorched and blackened skin
         within my heart the growing grey
         as the storm clouds came rolling in


    i heard myself in the wind today
    my own voice comforting
    on the ground my shadow bounced
    and kept me company


         scared to hear the sounds so clear
         my own voice deafens me
         the monster lurks quite content
         where others cannot see


    i saw myself in the shade today
    protected from the sun
         tried to hide under a tree
         away from everyone
     

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    SavVySam commented on today

    08-13-2010

    An disembodied perspective of observation and commentary on perspectives held by you....very interesting and definitely requires, a second and third read...I enjoyed this interesting write!;)
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    Dano

    08/16/2010

    thank you very much sam... your insight and comments are always welcome...

    Springsize commented on today

    08-08-2010

    dano, your style is true, and your poem's words dropped my awe...... from the fear of being seen, and protection with the trees, to the dualities of the elements, as if Mother Nature was exacting a complete two sided experience... and the view from your side is inclusive of the sun as both good versus adverse ... ---, wonderful to see or dream of, but difficult to experience..., is key. and I appreciate the continued analogies of cloud and sun throughout the poem, using a blending of opposites.... and all in total rhyme.... and heart...
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    Dano

    08/16/2010

    thank you for taking the time to read and comment it is very much appriciated...

    WordSlinger commented on today

    08-01-2010

    lol, this is cool I just clicked back over and you where on the like it button on Black Water, I haven't forgotten about ya, and Im not here to study, I am hear to enjoy, study later, when I have time, lol. Ok, any room next to that tree, so I can take a break, smoke'm if ya got em, Dano you see what we have here Dano, is a winner, do you have any idea what you created, look around this poem, you created this, you did, sink you feet deep into bro, it's yours, and you deserve praise for this, ty WS
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    WordSlinger

    08/01/2010

    I see now that you got nined, interesting, Dano, I'll give ya am extra point, so you haven't lost nothing, believe that, WS

    Dano

    08/01/2010

    thank you so much wordslinger for all of your kind words

    redbloodink commented on today

    07-30-2010

    I try to hide too, it just never seems too work...... deffentantly can't hide from God... Jesus wont let me... He says for I lived so shall you.... red by the way nice write.....
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    Dano

    08/01/2010

    thanks for taking the time to read and comment red

    redbloodink

    08/01/2010

    yw..... red

    genevievemust commented on today

    07-30-2010

    great write! a poem inside a poem...genius! loved the way you structured it. challenge yourself to see if you can write another with the exact formation but this time with positive emotions...
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    Dano

    08/01/2010

    i might just do that genevieve... thanks for the comment

    In science one tries to tell people, in such a way as to be understood by everyone, something that no one ever knew before. But in poetry, it's the exact opposite.

    Franz Kafka (1883-1924) Czech writer.

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