i saw myself in the sun today
     it burned my eyes
its warmth washed over my skin
     it burned me to a crisp

i saw myself in the clouds today
     they filled me full of grey
gracefully floating across the sky
     they rained down upon my face

i heard myself in the wind today
     i was deafened by the screams
a gentle voice flowing free
     the sound was deafening

i saw myself in my own shadow today
     a monster did appear
bouncing carelessly across the ground
     stalking me with fear

i saw myself in the shade today
     huddled under a tree
trying to cool from the summer sun 
     my body began to freeze

i saw myself in the sun today
its warmth washed over my skin
and after the clouds floated by
i saw the sun again

     with blinded eyes i tried to see
     my scorched and blackened skin
     within my heart the growing grey
     as the storm clouds came rolling in

i heard myself in the wind today
my own voice comforting
on the ground my shadow bounced
and kept me company

     scared to hear the sounds so clear
     my own voice deafens me
     the monster lurks quite content
     where others cannot see

i saw myself in the shade today
protected from the sun

     tried to hide under a tree
     away from everyone


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SavVySam commented on today


An disembodied perspective of observation and commentary on perspectives held by you....very interesting and definitely requires, a second and third read...I enjoyed this interesting write!;)



thank you very much sam... your insight and comments are always welcome...

Springsize commented on today


dano, your style is true, and your poem's words dropped my awe...... from the fear of being seen, and protection with the trees, to the dualities of the elements, as if Mother Nature was exacting a complete two sided experience... and the view from your side is inclusive of the sun as both good versus adverse ... ---, wonderful to see or dream of, but difficult to experience..., is key. and I appreciate the continued analogies of cloud and sun throughout the poem, using a blending of opposites.... and all in total rhyme.... and heart...



thank you for taking the time to read and comment it is very much appriciated...

WordSlinger commented on today


lol, this is cool I just clicked back over and you where on the like it button on Black Water, I haven't forgotten about ya, and Im not here to study, I am hear to enjoy, study later, when I have time, lol. Ok, any room next to that tree, so I can take a break, smoke'm if ya got em, Dano you see what we have here Dano, is a winner, do you have any idea what you created, look around this poem, you created this, you did, sink you feet deep into bro, it's yours, and you deserve praise for this, ty WS



I see now that you got nined, interesting, Dano, I'll give ya am extra point, so you haven't lost nothing, believe that, WS



thank you so much wordslinger for all of your kind words

redbloodink commented on today


I try to hide too, it just never seems too work...... deffentantly can't hide from God... Jesus wont let me... He says for I lived so shall you.... red by the way nice write.....



thanks for taking the time to read and comment red



yw..... red

genevievemust commented on today


great write! a poem inside a poem...genius! loved the way you structured it. challenge yourself to see if you can write another with the exact formation but this time with positive emotions...



i might just do that genevieve... thanks for the comment

A poem begins as a lump in the throat, a sense of wrong, a homesickness, a lovesickness. It finds the thought and the thought finds the words.

Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

Dano’s Poems (150)

Title Comments
Title Comments
from an angels view 19
searching the darkness 10
a letter from santa 14
thanksgiving (acrostic) 12
the depth of... 11
ive wished 7
absentee 12
this is... 13
a journey into the dark 7
the cold of november 14
your voice 12
the yin to the yang 14
twisted 9
autumn 14
i think it happened again 11
luna~tic 19
the darkness 13
a blinding eclipse 16
the universe... 18
the wind of sorrow 14
my sorrow weeps 16
where but the dark... 12
immortal kiss 47
in a darkened room 17
our mother 7
within these flames 12
nocturnal (acrostic) classic rock 7
behind wrought iron bars 25
what i write (part 2) 8
today 17
the world in grey 6
the reality of... 5
in the shadow of a mountain 6
nothing will ever be the same 10
of cemetary dreams (and nightmare scapes) 12
next to a bed... 18
but... 15
at a funeral 12
seventeen (acrostic) 11
the fortunate one(s) 7
what did i do... 24
ashes to dust 45
dancing in the moonlight 14
disempowering the pain 14
the butterfly 10
what i write 14
sorry (i killed the after glow) 11
the humidity rises (an erotic tale) 9
pieces of light 8
the sad pumpkin &... 9
my face 12
for a long time... 14
(an explination of) distractions 6
tell me... 6
the charelston cookie tin 9
silent self destruction 8
exposed 13
the means of the day (a true valentines poem) 2
a poem about nothing... 8
blood bleeds black 7
dissecting myself 3
i will be just fine 3
the stacking of bricks 3
the complexities of depression... 4
spirits & ghosts 3
**random chaos** 2
bloodlust 3
...somethings missing... 2
15 years... 3
beauty sleeps entombed (parts 1 & 2) 3
**untitled** 2
the overstuffed closet 3
the candy dish 2
anxiety speaks 2
**untitled** 2
myself and the light 6
the fog 2
fire and tears 3
cerebral meltdown 3
sometimes i wish... 1
drawing strength from a starr... 2
**untitled** 1
the flower garden 3
nature... 1
reaching out 2
the dark and the light... 1
the insistent demon 2
sorry... 3
forgive me lover... (parts 1 & 2) 2
im so sorry... 3
**no title... just random thoughts** 1
to eternity... 2
winter wind whips... 1
tired 2
lucid dream 1
the rains came... 2
the mourning light 1
another jagged pill 1
i just cant... 1
burning within 4
inside of me 1
projected pain 1
the night... the dakness & the truth? 1
panic 2
the mourning fog 1
when the fires burn 1
through the night 1
shadow casts 0
a mournful rain 1
i cant protect me 2
my comfort place 0
an echo shifts 1
the monster 2
welcome to my life 0
the past is alive... 1
... 1
standing on the edge 2
my smile... 1
anxiety 2
my reality 0
another view... 0
untitled... 0
jagged pill 2
in the dark 1
what to do 1
how can i... 1
life... 3
a crust of pain 1
keeping me weak... 2
my dark world 3
another night of wondering 2
in the attic 4
i hold most dear 2
the me inside of me 2
another day 1
dreamed in a dream 2
a year in the life (dealing with death) 1
i look... 1
where my secrets are kept 1
a mouthful of words 2
i will not fear (when my eyes are blind) 2
i am aware (i'm already dead) 7
standing in the silence of my own shadow... 3
a blinding dark 1
growing pain 3
the longest of nights 5
... 7