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Folks,

OK.. I've fiddled with this enough to get it out of draft stage.  I'm open to feedback on this.  In fact I'd really appreciate your critique.

Thanks for reading.

Hope

"In the unlikely story that is America
There had never been anything false
About hope."  -  Barack Obama



The odds are thin, the shot is long
So many things that could go wrong
But still, as long as hope is there
Action follows and not despair.

The hope of living peacefully,
The hope of dreams fulfilled,
The hope of health, and of wealth,
And of productive fields tilled.

Of life, of love, of golden years,
The hope to simply be,
To watch our children growing up
Healthy, strong and free.

It's funny how we're made, you know,
Both how we work and why.
As long as we hold on to hope
We never cease to try.

As long as there's the slightest chance
As long as there's a shot,
We try to keep our sights on that
And give all we've got.

As long as there's the slightest hope,
If any chance at all,
We reach out for that golden ring
Or run to catch that ball!

It's only when we give hope up
On that eternal day,
That death in somber robes may come
And steal our breath away.

So what is this hope?  Life is hope,
And nothing less it seems.
As long as can keep up hope
We'll live to follow dreams.

Hope is also motivation,
The drive to see it through,
The will to love the will to work
The will to go and do.

Just as at sea a drowning man
Will always grab a rope,
So too, in our darkest hour
We always cling to hope.

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MootPoint commented on Hope

07-30-2009

Very nice poem. I stumbled over just a small part. I would make this change: The hope of living peacefully, The hope of dreams fulfilled, The hope of health and of wealth, And of productive fields tilled. Flows better. Otherwise very nice. Only my humble opinion.

gmcookie

07/30/2009

You know, that's an excellent suggestion my friend. I think you are right. Thanks for that. You should read my latest, "The Reason Why". I've already had more than a few pointers from folks on that one, but would be interested in seeing what you think.

laydbak1 commented on Hope

07-21-2009

All true, my friend... It gives purpose to being here... It's why we try to make the best of life we can while we're here... Great feel good piece...

SpiritSong commented on Hope

07-17-2009

Very inspirational...the heart that goes on and on..in faith believing..a doer of the work and not a hearer only...great piece GMcookie...

lightcourier commented on Hope

07-10-2009

I've always been fascinated by that steady flicker in man's heart. Thank you for a great poem celebrating the strength of hope. Strong enough to help frankl escape torturous hell. Excellent work. Thanks!

gypsyf8 commented on Hope

07-01-2009

perfect -- a beautiful message - said beautifully . . . .great write!!

Poetry is not an expression of the party line. It's that time of night, lying in bed, thinking what you really think, making the private world public, that's what the poet does.

Allen Ginsberg (1926-1997) U.S. poet.

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