Clones

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    Another new Sci-Fi poem. I'm starting an anthology. Yes, I know the last few poems are metrically identical and it gets old after a while. I'll rearrange them in the book to break up the monotony or perhaps alter the rhythm in them. This is after all a first draft. Enjoy the read, my friends. Comments always gladly welcomed.

    Clones

     Clones are we, all test tube bred,
    Decanted from our tanks,
    Genetically selected
    To join the noble ranks.

    Crafted to be killers and
    Created to defend
    The Galactic Federation
    Until the very end.

    Raised in rows and columns we
    All trained in how to kill
    Those pathetic fools who choose
    To stand against our will.

    The will that makes this union great
    The will that men must fear
    The will that guarantees the peace
    Both far away and near.

    Orders come from distant stars
    Close to galactic core
    They tell what worlds to conquer next
    And how to wage the war

    We crush the opposition there
    We make the people see
    The Federation's justice,
    It's sweet democracy.

    We never question orders, nor
    Would ever ask them why,
    To spread the joys of liberty
    So many have to die...

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    Chaos128 commented on Clones

    02-12-2011

    I never got too ruffled up over the prospect of clones. I guess it's a benefit of being my own evil twin.
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    gmcookie

    02/12/2011

    Hehe.. the conceit is less a comment on biotechnology then it is on political manipulation. I know a lot of clones - even if they are biologically unique.

    rsalassi commented on Clones

    02-06-2011

    I like this very much, although methinks you have strayed from one focus to another..or am I seeing things...or is it important? The first four verses and the last three verses seem to be different poems sharing the same meter and contruction. Nonetheless, superior concepts nicel executed.
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    gmcookie

    02/06/2011

    I'm not sure Richard. You know how I always like to have that zinger in the last line. In this poem the zinger is supposed to be that perhaps all the brainwashing has left a sliver of conscience, somehow. A sliver of hope, perhaps.

    Teardrops commented on Clones

    02-01-2011

    you are not going sy fy its wars and our own country . We are brain washed and then sent to fight . YOu have written a truly great poem and i for one am so tired of wars Marie
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    Hampton commented on Clones

    01-31-2011

    Love the message and the rhyme..................................Hampton
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