Hung's Story

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OK... Another story from Vietnam. I'm still polishing some rough edges on this one, but it's getting better. That last poem I posted was my story. This poem, however, is Hung's Story. I appear briefly in here as the traveling stranger. But this story is totally true, and, in broad strokes, outlines the tale of my "adopted" son, Pham Van Hung. I'm in Vietnam right now to attend Hung's wedding this weekend.

Hung's Story

In the deepest dark of night
A chilling mist came swirling down
To soak the trees and soak the grass
And roofs and streets of Hanoi town.

Huddled on the sidewalk there
With only newsprint for a bed
Two children shivered in the cold
And thought about the day ahead.

Hung was just a boy of five.
His sister Hang was nine or ten.
Together they'd walk hand in hand
Through Hanoi's teeming streets again.

Their parents dead, the pair condemned
To walk with that unceasing tread,
Fifteen, twenty miles a day,
In search of rice or soup or bread

From stoic unknown strangers
Who'd mutter as the kids go by,
"There but for the grace of  God,
In despair, go you or I."

Like swirling mist in deepest night
Hope is an elusive thing
Which favors neither lowest serf
Nor merchant, Lord or even King.

But Hung, despite unlikely odds,
Held firmly to his thread of hope.
It was that which drove him on,
That which enabled him to cope.

Child traffickers found them at last.
They kidnapped Hang, left Hung alone.
In bitter tears he wept her loss,
His family gone, his fate unknown.

It was hope that made him wait
Two long years for her to run,
Sad hope, at last, that drove him on
To Saigon when his wait was done.

When you read the hero's tale
The road is paved with many quests,
Paved with battles and with trials,
Paved as well with grueling tests.

To make his way to Saigon, Hung
Had to ride atop a train.
For two full days it snaked its way
Through Vietnam's diverse terrain.

While lying flat he held on tight,
Not letting vigilance retire.
To sit up but invited death
From tunnel or electric wire.

And like the heroes sung of old,
When Hung's test was finally passed,
The gods smiled down upon that boy
And gave him his reward at last.

A traveling stranger saw him there.
And found for him a family,
And sponsored him for thirteen years
Through school and university.

When he at last earned his degree
Hung’s hope paid off in the long run.
For in all the university
Little Hung ranked number one!

Dear reader, understand this well,
There was no future bathed in light,
No guarantee nor promise made,
Yet hope and effort changed Hung's plight.

So when you're down and feeling low
Like you have given your last bit,
Recall this tale of Pham Van Hung,
The little boy who wouldn't quit....

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rsalassi commented on Hung's Story

12-28-2010

A second visit to this gem overwhelmingly reinforces my initail belief this is not only a wondeful tribute to a courageous young man, but speaks loudly to all of us with its positive affirmation in the human spirit. I marvel at your talent unabashedly, sir.

gmcookie

12/28/2010

Aw shucks, Richard. There are a lot of talented folks on this site. I write this stuff because I love poetry and because I have something to say which occasionally lends itself to the medium. I think, nowadays, people believe "message poetry" is obsolete. Perhaps it was killed by Hallmark - who knows. But in the Victorian era people didn't feel that way. My work is just a throwback to a style that found itself on the dust heap of history.

rsalassi

12/28/2010

You may poo-poo my praise, dear modest friend (others, too, have done so), but I stand naked and proud for the honor of rummaging through that dust heap and discovering your contributions. (You need not respond with any allusions to my nakedness.)

gmcookie

12/28/2010

Lol... Naked no less... Excuse me while I go wash my eyeballs with lye soap.... hehe

rsalassi

12/29/2010

Hruuummmph!! You just had to..you just had to do that which I asked you not to! There goes your rank of genius in my book, you are now a mere mountebank.

gmcookie

12/29/2010

Lol! I'm sorry for poking fun at you. Of course I'm certain that your perfect body is the pinnacle of God's creation (or so we have been told). Not that we ever really felt much like a pinnacles, that is.

Balladeer commented on Hung's Story

12-28-2010

Nice work again, sir. You tell the tale well and remain true to the syllable counts and rhythm which makes for such delightful reading. After all, what girl wouldn't want a man who is Hung??? (sorry - couldn't resist ;) )

gmcookie

12/28/2010

Lol... I always thought it a coincidence that his name is Hung and his sister is Hang, which is the present tense of Hung, I suppose. I do know that he is very handsome and managed to snag a beautiful bride. They have a baby on the way now. So I guess that in the end Hung found his family after all.

stellar commented on Hung's Story

10-14-2010

This is really an inspiring story which u narrate interistengly....you hold my interest and I really love to read this kind of stories,,,poverty is not a hindrance to success...^_^ v

Springsize commented on Hung's Story

10-07-2010

Your poem, written as a story, was incredibly captivating and I could not stop reading, enthralled to hear of Hung's Story... and the kindly sponsor who became a father, knowing it is of you... is as equally touching as the boy's quest to find a place in a harsh environment, that now wants and loves him... two souls, equally responsible... your story brings the tears, grateful for people as you both...

gmcookie

10/07/2010

I just came back from his wedding in Vietnam. It was great to see him. Yes, I love him like a son, and couldn't be prouder of him. He is pretty special, you see...

Hampton commented on Hung's Story

10-01-2010

Well done in a stylistic fashion that speaks to the author's talent.....................Hampton

To have great poets there must be great audiences too.

Walt Whitman, American Poet (1819-1892)

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