Red Moon

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OK.... after weeks of fiddling with this one I'm going to call it finished (at least for now). Much thanks to Paolo and Harver for their critiques. Friends who are willing to speak the truth to you are rare indeed. Their feedback is greatly appreciated. As always, comments (public or private) are welcome.

Red Moon

On silver nights, the moon seems white.
Yet, red she rose above the trees
And painted rusted honey ghosts
Across the scattered leaves.

Sometimes I've seen the sea as green
Or tranquil blue on summer day
But gray and angry roiled in storm,
When men get in her way.

The poet said the rose is red,
Yet, pink by springtime breezes tossed,
Or yellow, on a mellow day,
And brown in autumn's frost.

I've felt too that love is true,
It's vivid colors unobscured,
Yet found beneath a yellow moon
That love can be demurred.

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KtIrish commented on Red Moon

08-26-2010

This one is amazing. It's totally in my favorites. The rythym and flow is impeccable, and the emotion is wonderful. :)

gmcookie

08/26/2010

Hehe... I though you'd like this one. It's not that unlike something you might write, you know.

KtIrish

08/26/2010

Lol, I can only hope.

Paolo commented on Red Moon

07-09-2010

I believe that this is a jewel of a poem. You've captured images and made them accessible to us and I can't wait to see what you write next.

Tarlton009 commented on Red Moon

07-07-2010

Love it my three favorit elements of nature, the moon, the sea, and the rose. bravo sir, bravo

rsalassi commented on Red Moon

06-23-2010

Your touch is as light as the petals you describe. You are truly gifted, my friend. Again, thanks for letting us read your work. We are the fortunate in that regard.

gmcookie

06/24/2010

Coming from you, my friend, that is a true compliment. I thank you.

Paolo

07/09/2010

We are, yes, fortunate, to have this poetry to bathe in.

ginga commented on Red Moon

06-17-2010

cokie, This is such a soft and tranquil message that it welcomes the reader to read again. What wonderful visuals are derived from this. ginga

gmcookie

06/18/2010

Ginga... Thanks. I put a lot of effort into getting those visuals into this piece. I think you are right about the tranquility. It has a sort of resignation to the immutable laws of nature, beauty, loss, helplessness... such is life, I fear.

Poetry is not an expression of the party line. It's that time of night, lying in bed, thinking what you really think, making the private world public, that's what the poet does.

Allen Ginsberg (1926-1997) U.S. poet.

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