Icarus

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    Poem Commentary

    This evening's meditation... Even if Icarus had survived his flight, that day was the apex of his life and it would all have been downhill from there.

    Icarus

    Because my wings were only made of wax
    Perhaps I should have listened to your pleas
    Perhaps I might have spared myself the death
    That waited in those unrelenting seas
    But you were never one to spare your tongue
    You often tried to warn me of the fate
    That teetered on the edges of my risks
    I always thought your morbid fears too great
    And father, on that one immortal day
    You gave me chance to do what none had done
    To dance among the silver fleecy clouds
    And touch the golden armor of the sun
    So as I spiral plunged into the sea
    My heart thought not of fear nor salty brine
    I knew this was the apex of my life
    And all that stood before me was decline.
    Because my wings were only made of wax
    Perhaps I should have listened to your pleas.
    Perhaps I might have spared myself the death
    That waited in those unrelenting seas.
    But you were never one to spare your tongue.
    You often tried to warn me of the fate
    That teetered on the edges of my risks.
    I always thought your morbid fears too great.
    My father, on that one immortal day,
    You gave me chance to do what none had done,
    To dance among the silver fleecy clouds,
    And touch the golden armor of the sun.
    So as I spiral plunged into the sea,
    My heart thought not of fear nor salty brine.
    I soared, on this the apex of my life,
    For all that stood before me was decline.
    Because my wings were only made of wax
    Perhaps I should have listened to your pleas.
    Perhaps I might have spared myself the death
    That waited in those unrelenting seas.

    But you were never one to spare your tongue.
    You often tried to warn me of the fate
    That teetered on the edges of my risks.
    I always thought your morbid fears too great.

    Dear father, on this one immortal day,
    You gave me chance to do what none had done,
    To dance among the silver fleecy clouds,
    And touch the golden armor of the sun.

    I know that when you look back on this day
    Your mind will always focus on the worst,
    But know, in all the history of man,
    For each endeavor only one is first.

    So as I spiral plunged into the sea,
    I never thought to fear the salty brine.
    I soared, on this the apex of my life,
    Because what laid before me was decline.

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    tierra7 commented on Icarus

    02-09-2013

    GM, You did one tremendous job on this piece!! Excellent..Excellent flow..(((huggz)))Tierra@}-'-,

    gmcookie

    02/10/2013

    Tierra! Its good to see you're back. It seems like a lot of the old timers are coming home these days. Welcome back. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem...

    slimgoodwoody commented on Icarus

    02-09-2013

    Icarus, you have explained that once greatness is achieved everything else is mundane at best. Excellent poem! Loved the rhythm and the rhyme scheme, of course!! Great poem!

    gmcookie

    02/09/2013

    My friend, thanks for your kind words. It seems to me that Icarus is the archetype for a whole category of brash young men who always need to push the boundaries and test the limits. I suspect much of the survival and progress of the human race is attributable to these kids, even if we sometimes think them unwise.

    Tempestlady commented on Icarus

    02-08-2013

    Nicef rhythm and nice rhyme. Helped that I studied the poem in college and was familiar with the tale. Nice insight into it though. Write on.................

    gmcookie

    02/09/2013

    Thanks, Tempest. I'm glad you enjoyed the piece. There always seems to be this dynamic between fathers and sons. I didn't why it wouldn't have applied to Icarus as well.

    Poetry is what is lost in translation.

    Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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