Night Time Sky

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Here's a little frolick for you.  I used to love the night time sky when I was a kid.

And the part about the other universe in Eridanus (Orion's River) - guess what?  That part at least is based on science:

http://www.newscientist.com/article/mg19626311.400

Enjoy,

gmcookie

Night Time Sky

When I was just a little boy

I loved the night time sky.

On grassy hill I'd lay and stare

And dream that I could fly.

 

I'd fly above the treetops and

Look down upon my house.

It looked just like a little toy,

My dog looked like a mouse!

 

I'd fly betwixt the fleecy clouds

The lights of town below

Like iridescent strings of pearls

On velvet hills tableaux.

 

And up above in deepest black

The stars did brightly shine.

In Scorpius, Antares was

A diamond clear and fine.

 

I left behind the atmosphere

And frolicked into space

The Earth below a crystal orb

With jewels on it's face.

 

I looped around our yellow sun

(The Milky Way's a must!)

And then I'd fly through Nebulae

And clouds of stellar dust.

 

Somewhere in Eridanus

Orion's waters flow,

I found an empty darkened spot

Devoid of starlight's glow.

 

I entered through the opening

(For such it was it seems)

And found another universe

Beyond my wildest dreams!

 

In there, I found a galaxy

With silver spiral rings

Composed of thinnest gossamer

Like ghostly ether wings.

 

I settled for a yellow star

With sunspots on it's face

And for a sapphire planet that

Was spinning there in space.

 

Trees and hills and seas of grass

And then what did I see?

A boy lay there, immersed in dreams

Staring back at me!

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HarverTomsson commented on Night Time Sky

10-13-2009

Ah, the healing power of whimsy! Transcendant in the flavor of pink cotton candy on a cardboard cone.

laydbak1 commented on Night Time Sky

06-10-2009

i loved this one.... whispy, zinging along, unafraid of the unknown most would fear at heart, then ending right back where you started... very nice read... reminds me somewhat of a stan rogers famous song - northwest passage... after leaving the east, trekking across the land, following in the footsteps of the first who made that arduous journey, he finds himself staring at the bearing sea in alaska... and, he writes... how then am i so different, from the first men through this way... like them i left a settled life, and threw it all away... to seek a northwest passage, at the call of many men... to find there, but... the road back home again...

UnworthyFather commented on Night Time Sky

06-10-2009

Very great write, gmcookie!!! Your imagery is magnificent, and the journey fun! Thanks for sharing this with us. 10

Paolo commented on Night Time Sky

06-09-2009

How wonderful it is to make this trip in this poem. Being also a person who finds astronomy fascinating this work speaks to me. I like the way the author weaves the trip and uses rhyming so naturally. I have one suggestion and that is, as this is a trip for one boy, the line, "beyond our wildest dreams" may read more consistently if it read, "beyond my wildest dreams." Of course I may be reading this wrong.

Paolo

06/23/2009

This is one of my most favorite poems. I also loved the night sky and this resonated with me a great deal.

gmcookie

06/09/2009

Paolo, a very good point. Thank you for that. I'll make that change!

ANNAMAE commented on Night Time Sky

06-07-2009

Wonderful poem! I really enjoyed it. This should be in a children's book of poems. You are a real poet in my mind.

gmcookie

06/07/2009

Annamae, It's funny you mention that. I thought of a children's book as I wrote it. I could see some of the illustrations in my head. Some of the words are a bit big, however. Thank you for your rating and your kind comments. Keep Reading my friend. You might like "Tribute to Nkosi" as well. gmcookie

Poetry is not an expression of the party line. It's that time of night, lying in bed, thinking what you really think, making the private world public, that's what the poet does.

Allen Ginsberg (1926-1997) U.S. poet.

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