Universes

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I mean, I'm just saying, what if?

Universes

What if she's a dog just dreaming she's a cat
And we are but the figments of her dreams?
What if all our universe is sitting on the back
Of a flea on a dog in a world where it seems
That people are the pets and love is the extreme
And all that really matters is your smell
Where the people bark all night and their masters cannot sleep
So they open up theirs windows and they yell
And a moth flutters in enchanted by the spell
Of the candle that is burning in the night
As it circles round the flame from the dust on its wing
A universe screams, and dies in the fire and the light
What if she's a dog just dreaming she's a cat
And we are but the figments of her dreams?
What if all our universe is sitting on the back
Of a flea on a dog in a world where it seems

That people are the pets and love is the extreme,
And all that really matters is your smell,
Where the people bark all night, and their masters cannot sleep
So they open up the windows and they all begin to yell,

While a moth flutters in, enchanted by the spell
Of a candle that is burning in the night;
As it circles round the flame, from the dust on its wing,
Whole universes scream, and perish, in the fire and the light?

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Azzrella commented on Universes

03-28-2013

A`la Horton hears A Who! I wonder about this myself, What if we're a speck? How big is the universe and what contains it? Almost everything has something to hold it together. A cell, a body, a cup ans so on....Can you tell me!?

poett commented on Universes

02-01-2013

Great write... It made me smile n its rare when I'm super nervous... Love it

gogant commented on Universes

01-31-2013

It does one good to imagine other realisms. Nice one, GM.........................................gogant

Crush commented on Universes

01-30-2013

such a wonderful, wonderful little journey you just took us on. wow, i love your work. it is always high quality and entertaining. this is going into my faves. thanks. 10x10.

gmcookie

01/30/2013

Thanks, Crush. I was sitting around the table with my kids the other night and the cat curled up in my lap and went to sleep. That prompted to ask if we were, perhaps, only characters in her dream. Well, from there my mind spiraled out of control and this was the result. I'm glad you're twisted enough to enjoy it. It makes me feel less alone

HarverTomsson commented on Universes

01-30-2013

Death to Lunesta! LOL This is a great fantasy write!

gmcookie

01/30/2013

Hey, Harver, my friend. It's great to hear your voice again amidst all the mindless babble of cyberspace. I'm glad you enjoyed the piece. It's a bit silly, at least we hope it is.

Poetry is not an expression of the party line. It's that time of night, lying in bed, thinking what you really think, making the private world public, that's what the poet does.

Allen Ginsberg (1926-1997) U.S. poet.

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