Eddie Noel

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Another new poem - written on the ferry. Its a true story - and a good one, but the poem is still rough. I've sanded some rough edges, but more remains to be done. Suggestions and comments are welcome of course.

Eddie Noel

Eddie Noel was a  black man
Down Mississippi way.
He volunteered in World War II
And went to join the fray.

He was an expert marksman;
Some folks would even claim
He could strike a match from fourty yards
So deadly was his aim.

Willie Dickard was a white man.
Who hated colored folk,
Except, that is, for Eddie's wife,
And the passion she evoked.

When Eddie came to get his wife
Papa Dickard held him tight
While Willie worked him over
On that January night.

So Eddie up and got his gun
To hold them both at bay.
But Willie tried to rush him
And take that gun away.

Then Eddie Noel shot Willie down;
He laid him out that day.
They buried him beneath six feet
Of Mississippi clay.

Sheriff Byrd then formed a posse,
A lynch mob by all rights.
They caught Eddie in a crossfire
On a country road at night.

Now at one end of the crossfire
Was Deputy Malone,
The hardest hitting lawman
That the state had ever known.

Some say that he was brutal,
The meanest cuss by far.
Some say he dragged a colored boy
To death behind his car.

So Eddie up and shot him down;
He laid him out that day.
They buried him beneath six feet
Of Mississippi clay.

Six members of the lynch mob then
Trapped Eddie in his shack.
Joe Stewart busted down the door,
Inside it was pitch black.

Eddie shot Joe Stewart down;
He laid him out I say.
They buried Joe beneath six feet
Of Mississippi clay.

Then Eddie come out shootin'.
As he stood there in the sun
In that withering crossfire,
He shot them one by one.

When the smoke had finally cleared
Three men were laid in clay,
Three more men were wounded,
And the rest had run away!

They had to call that lynch mob off.
T'was more than they could bear.
They took their whisky, dogs and guns
N' high tailed it outta there.

Now you can take a man for money,
You can maybe take his wife,
You can take all of his property,
And even take his life.

But one thing you should know
Is you haven't got the right
To take away his dignity
And not expect a fight.

Folks talked about Mack Parker,
And what was done to Emmet Till,
But when Eddie Noel's name came up
Those folks got mighty still.

For he never went to prison,
He died when old and grey,
And they buried him beneath six feet
Of Indiana clay.

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Paolo commented on Eddie Noel

12-30-2010

The use of rhyme or syllable counts can be effectively used when desiring to retain the impact of a line or statement. Here we are guided by abreviation often alone. The telling of a story in poetry is often done with varying sucess. Here the case is made with only a stumble or two. One has to ask if the story is well told? For the most part, I'd say it was well enough told. It does not lasp into the corny, trite details and instead strives to keep every word useful. I look forward to seeing the rewrites.

Balladeer commented on Eddie Noel

12-28-2010

Nice work and good story. If you want the honest critique, the syllable counts are rough and take away from the flow of the lines but they are minor and can be easily fixed. You spin a good story, friend.

gmcookie

12/28/2010

Yes, I know. I am usually neurotic about counting syllables (as you can see from the earlier work), but decided to take a little vacation from that recently. I mean if folks can get away with free verse, I suppose I might be forgiven for letting my hair down a bit. But I know what you mean. I notice things like that when I read verse, so it stands to reason that other (similarly neurotic) folks might notice the same thing. I just put up a piece I did the day after Christmas where I decided that I was going to pull an Edna St. Vincent Milay number and try to ignore syllable counts altogether. I like the piece, but in that particular case I think I need to go back and put a little more effort into the scansion. Thanks for your comments, my friend. I figured that you, being a balladeer, would enjoy the reads. I certainly enjoy reading your ballads.

WordSlinger commented on Eddie Noel

12-18-2010

This is power, I like every bit about it. This is why you are one of my favorite, ty WS, much to appreciate

ginga commented on Eddie Noel

12-18-2010

cookie, Your tale is one that lives on in the memories of many who lived to tell it. You have penned a fine tale whilst staying true to your always impecable poetic form, rhythm and rhyme. ginga

Olan01 commented on Eddie Noel

12-16-2010

Excellent work and extremely powerful, my friend. You write with such skill and grace. Love, peace and freedom, Olan.

The true philosopher and the true poet are one, and a beauty, which is truth, and a truth, which is beauty, is the aim of both.

Ralph Waldo Emerson, American Poet (1803-1882)

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