Pink Flamingo

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    Poem Commentary

    My latest ballad. It still needs some polishing, but I hope you enjoy the read anyway.

    Pink Flamingo

    The Pink Flamingo Trailer Park
    Was on a cul de sac,
    With highway 4 in front of it
    And wheat fields in the back.

    A shower house of cinder block,
    Some graveled winding roads,
    And trailers scattered here and there,
    Just simple small abodes,

    Each rudimentary at best,
    A shelter from the storm,
    To keep you dry in summertime
    And in the winter, warm.

    Virginia Klein in number one
    Was widowed in the war.
    She never took another man,
    She wouldn't know what for.

    Instead she had flamingos made 
    Of plastic and of wire,
    Her needlepoint and knitting,
    And a cat she named McGuire.

    Old man Jackson lived down there
    In trailer number three.
    Abandoned, he, by all his friends;
    His wife, his family.

    Because he was an angry drunk
    Who couldn't keep his hands
    Off his wife and kids when they would
    Balk at his demands.

    In trailer eight Amelia Glass
    Lived with her son, young Tom.
    She loved her Tommy half to death
    And he sure loved his mom.

    A single mom, she worked two jobs
    To make the frayed ends meet,
    To feed her little latch key son,
    And keep shoes on his feet.

    One summer night a whopping storm
    Came ripping cross the plain,
    The lightning flashed, the thunder crashed,
    The ruptured sky poured rain.

    And then it grew most deadly still,
    The sirens start to blare,
    'Till far away they heard the sound
    Of freight trains on the air.

    Amelia had to work that night,
    A waitressing in town,
    Though Tommy tried to call his mom
    The phone lines all were down.

    As louder came that twister's sound,
    Just like a hundred trains,
    Poor Tommy covered up his ears
    And screamed his momma's name.

    In morning's early pale grey light,
    Debris was strewn around.
    They searched the trailer park in vain,
    Survivors were not found.

    They laid Virginia down to rest
    Beside her husband, dear.
    Old Jackson had a service too,
    But no one came to hear.

    They never found young Tommy Glass.
    I've heard some good folks say
    The angel of the Lord came down
    And bore that child away.

    Yet, somewhere out on highway 4,
    Behind a cul de sac,
    A weedy lot is fenced off from
    The wheat fields in the back.

    And when the wind starts picking up,
    I've often heard it said,
    You'll hear young Tom.  He'll call his mom,
    As if he wasn't dead.

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    glenfitch commented on Pink Flamingo

    11-14-2011

    A great tale, and I have been one whose car has been tossed by a tornado myself.

    Tempestlady commented on Pink Flamingo

    09-18-2011

    My, your off to a good Halloween start....simply eerie and scary. Just wonderful. Write on...................Tlady

    HarverTomsson commented on Pink Flamingo

    09-17-2011

    Very good. If you change the match boxes for cracker tins you'll get a smoother flow.

    gmcookie

    09/18/2011

    Lol... See, that's why I always come to you... That is the one line in the piece that still bugs me scansion-wise. You are a true poet, my friend to zero in on that... Cracker tins, huh? I think that might work.

    gmcookie

    09/18/2011

    cookie tins... I think I'll change it to cookie tins. Cracker tins are such a historical reference most folks won't remember when saltines came in tins. But cookie tins - well they seem to just go on forever... hehe

    HarverTomsson

    09/18/2011

    I think I also saw a historical reference to poor white folks in the word cracker, not that it should be perpetuated, or anything. . .

    gmcookie

    09/19/2011

    I didn't think of that allusion. What did come to mind is the shape of cracker tins - they sort of resemble trailers. Then I thought of their shoddy construction - like a cheap trailer. But I figured none of that would register to somebody who had never seen one. Cracker tins are really the right metaphor. Cookie tins are more pragmatic since more people will get some kind of imagery out of it. But for us - you and me - let's think cracker tins... Hehe. Thanks again my friend.

    gmcookie

    09/20/2011

    Well... I'm outvoted! I was at my weekly poetry club meeting in Berkeley last night and was bragging about my friend Harver on OP who gives me such thoughtful advice. Everybody in the room agreed that I was crazy for not using "cracker tins". They said that one reference to "Poor White Trash" greatly strengthened the piece... Perhaps I was resisting because I grew up as "Trailer Trash". At least that's what people used to call me when I was a kid. But I think you are right, Harver. I'm convinced that "cracker tins" really is the right wording. So "cracker tins" it will be for all posterity... hehe

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