Nature

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    Hot off the presses folks. A first draft with more than a little polish needed. Enjoy the read. As usual, comments and especially suggestions are always welcome.

    Nature

    The fading light of setting sun
    Sinks slowly into purple seas
    It's rays suffused between the shrouds
    Of gold and bitter orange clouds,
    The outlined sillouetted trees,
    And Venus on the edge of night
    Beguiling all with silver light.

    The mountain peaks bedecked in snow,
    Their fir trees droop with loaded bough,
    The frozen brook all cloaked in mist
    Awaits the springtime's gentle kiss.
    A snow fox passes softly now.
    Yet buried deep and slumbering,
    The seeds and bulbs of nascent spring.

    Beneath the rainforest canopy
    Bejeweled with the fallen drops,
    The orchids riot in their hues
    Of yellow, orange, reds and blues,
    The mating chorus never stops
    A panoply in shades of green,
    A thousand creatures heard, unseen.

    As children we all understood
    That nature should be held in awe,
    We lay and stared at clouds and skies,
    We celebrated butterflies
    And so respected nature's law.
    Why is it we cannot see how
    The Earth needs us to do that now?

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    Teardrops commented on Nature

    12-04-2010

    you dont call, you dont write, thought you had moved to the ends of the earth lol . Your talent is timeless and the poem is wonderful . Nature is about to show her teeth if we dont stop slaping her i love this poem Glen thanks for the read Marie

    gmcookie

    12/05/2010

    Marie, I'm not ignoring you my friend. I haven't had as much time to write or goof off on OP since I moved. Slowly, order is returning. I'll be back my friend. I've joined a poetry club out here. We have open mike readings every Monday night in Berkeley, so for the first time I have started reading my poems in public. So far people like them... hehe

    Teardrops

    12/05/2010

    i am so happy for you Glen and you will be a hit i feel this and you have the talent its good to see you didnt run away from home lol Marie

    Chaos128 commented on Nature

    12-02-2010

    Take a picture while you can. The window's closing fast, and all the smart money is buying up stock in "Soylent Green".

    Olan01 commented on Nature

    12-02-2010

    This is quite visual poem of nature and well stated, though I don't usually associate orange with bitter, that is just me. Needless to say I like it. Olan.

    gmcookie

    12/02/2010

    Lol... Well, there is a color named bittersweet orange which is sort of what I was thinking of. It's a deep brownish orange. Unfortunately it was too many syllables to fit in without breaking the scansion. But I thought "bitter orange" why not. It invokes images for me of a dry withered orange, that just might be bittersweet in color. That's the nice thing about poems, they are rarely, if ever, finished. You can continue to tweak them word by word, syllable by syllable for as long as you like. Perhaps "bitter orange" will change at some point.

    Olan01

    12/02/2010

    Ah, yes, the bittersweet plant. Mom would pick it each year and put their berries in vase to show, thanks for reminding me of those warm memories.

    soulwriter commented on Nature

    12-01-2010

    There is grand visualization conjured by your words set forth in color and seasonal transitions. As time takes your mind in other directions the flow of this will smooth out a bit, however I still enjoyed the creativity... 10 for the creation Soul

    WordSlinger commented on Nature

    12-01-2010

    Amen, this is precious, I was just taken in a fyling Cookie mobile, and seen the beautiful earth, and I am hurt....

    To have great poets there must be great audiences too.

    Walt Whitman, American Poet (1819-1892)

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